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Cutting through a thickening fog
a dreary day of yesteryear
I squelched across the shallow bog
in hopes for guidelights to appear

A light I saw, not from a lantern
Ghostly shadows played across
the smokey whispers floating like phantoms
from under the mulshy water's moss

And from the under, sleething forward,
a nebulous shape with empty eyes
Cold fish fingers pulling my breath toward
itself, turning me to stone inside

something's rising, something's sinking
pale darkness, neverblinking
So people notice both the artwork and the poem =)

:+fav:/comment artwork here ---> [link]

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Note: Lots of made-up words! What is the name for words like that? Ones that don't exist, but you can understand what they mean, as they represent the sound or feeling of the action they are describing, given the right context?
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Antesoph Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
Woah, amazing. It was somewhat scary, and the artwork was great. All around amazing job. :D
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artifice-child Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2010
the meter of the rhyme wavered here and there, but when it was consistent, it WORKED.

lovely, lovely last two stanzas. and go ahead with the made-up words; it didn't jar me at all.
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Vasilisa-Uzhasnaja Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
It depends on how you pace yourself when reading it. It might sound wonky, but then again, it sounds right to me. I have no idea how to properly structure a poem :P Don't really care. This is the only one that rhymes.
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RavynLaRue Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
I just adore this piece! May I please use this for one of my novels (as an illustration) if I give you full credit, and a copy of the book? :please:
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RebekaPhotography Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Hey,
This piece has been featured!!
Be sure to check out the article, and fav it by clicking the green heart on the top left side, this will make sure more people see the article and your work! Also be sure to take a look at the other artist's work and give them some love, they deserve it :) [link]
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Trante Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009
not illiterate at all, we do it in french too. see the art post-refus global. excellent job
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LuisaPreissler Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
You're absolutely not an idiot, the poem is wonderful! I love Shakespeare and any kind of inventive new words, it's really beautiful. Fav! ;)
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PixyandTacobeans Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
i LOVE this <3 So beautiful and emotive!
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Vasilisa-Uzhasnaja Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much, I appreciate that :)
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jesusroxgirl Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
great rhyme scheme and descriptions! the pic is awesome, btw
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